Steal My Freedom

This is for my Portfolio class, it's actually of my OC Camille, but there's actually a story behind it.....that'll be covered in the manga but atm I'm not quite sure if I'm really finished or not :/ so any advice?
(btw, picture doesn't look exactly like this, the graphite is kinda shiny so hard to take a picture of and then attempted to make it look better on photoshop so it'd be easier to see..)
Tool: Graphite Pencil

this is an example of a 25 point commission (special commission type)